英語作文:文化和生活方式對學習語言的重要性
點評:整篇文章風格比較明顯,就是簡潔(和我以前公布的文章不太一樣)和喜歡使用倒裝句和定語從句??吹贸鰜?,作者是故意在炫耀自己已經掌握的句型。缺點么也很明顯,對某些詞匯的用法掌握地很不好,對某些句型的精確度也有待提高。
文化和生活方式對學習語言的重要性
When we learn a language, we should also learn the cultures and lifestyles of this country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that when you begin to learn a language, both cultures and lifestyles are indispensable for learning. Only learning cultrues and lifestyles can you have a good commond of what you learn.
結構分析: 1+1’的模式,最后一句是主題句。問題還是有的,比如第一句是介紹題目背景,但似乎寫得和題目還是太像了,最好是能夠變換的程度再大些。而最后一句表達觀點的主題句卻有明顯的語法錯誤和拼寫錯誤。所以起評分也只能在5-6 分之間了。值得一提的是,作者首段給人的感覺文章比較簡練,不像有的文章為了湊字數,廢話很多。
First of all, cultures paly a big role in languages. Colloquial phrases are pleasant to the ear, not only because they are familiar, but also because they reflect a unique aspect of a culture which is a symbol of countries or living areas. So necessary do you learn cultures first when you determine to learn a new language.
結構分析:作者還是一貫地秉承簡潔的寫作風格,給人感覺結構非常清晰,作者的寫作意圖和內容也非常容易把握。需要指出的是,作者很明顯在第一段和這段的最后一句話都企圖想用倒裝句來增加語言的多樣性,可惜的是都錯了!!!看來倒裝句沒有學好,呵呵。。。
In addition, some special languages in Canada and Austrilia have words that reflect a way of life that is connected close to the Earth. There are fifty different words that mean `snow` in one Canadian native language. Various local languages have been evolved through human`s lifes and have been continuing to change step by step. If we expect to learn the most aboriginal languages, lifestyles count for learning.
結構分析:此段似乎沒有太明顯的句型錯誤,但是詞匯錯誤卻多了(如紅色部分)。內容還是一貫地很容易把握。
When you make a decision to learn languages, a good advice recommended to you is that living with the local people whose mother language is what you will learn, can communicate with you frequently. In this way can you learn languages quickly ,efficiently and authoritatively.
結構分析:值得表揚的是此段最后一句倒裝句終于用對了。但是,紅色部分,即第一句由于企圖使用復雜句,導致出現了很嚴重的理解問題,這是一大敗筆!
To sum up, learning languages is not a simple task but a process of knowing different cultures and customs. So, to get involved in the cultures and lifestyles can make your learning happily .I am sure that you will enjoy every minute of learning languages. ( 251words )
結構分析:最后一段有一個小錯誤,其他都還好,屬于中規中矩的寫法。
總評:整篇文章風格比較明顯,就是簡潔(和我以前公布的文章不太一樣)和喜歡使用倒裝句和定語從句??吹贸鰜?,作者是故意在炫耀自己已經掌握的句型。
缺點么也很明顯,對某些詞匯的用法掌握地很不好,對某些句型的精確度也有待提高。